I
slyly entered the house, holding my breath. I had been keeping an eye on these
new kids on the block. I knew how their furniture was placed, which grocery
needed a refill as the week ended and of course where I would find my treasure. Alas, a vase tumbled and gave me away. Meow!
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His
loud wails broke me from my deep slumber. I checked my watch; I was asleep only
for 15 minutes! All had been taken care of - his feed, his diapers, his snuggly
teddy. And then I heard her sweet singing voice. Terrified, I ran to his room.
His mother had died giving him birth.
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Linking this to Day 6 of the Write Tribe Festival of words where we had to show our creative best in just 55 words. I enjoy writing 55 Fiction, you can see my previous attempts here.
The second is scared me.
ReplyDeletethat means it was good ;)
DeleteWow...
ReplyDeleteAditi...yeah, the second one scared me too a little bit but both great 55ers :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Kajal :)
DeleteScary second one !!
ReplyDeleteTaking that as a compliment Jyotsna :)
DeleteWOW..awesome 55er's. The second was scary!
ReplyDeleteThanks Kathy :)
DeleteNice little posts. The second one was eerie/scary.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteWoaa the last is brilliant... Loved your 55 fictions
ReplyDeleteI liked the first one.Why the singing voice in second story?Should it be screaming?
ReplyDeleteThanks :) actually the singing voice cz the mother was singing to put the baby to sleep again...
DeleteThe first one brought a smile and the second one... that was chilling!!
ReplyDeleteGood ones, Aditi :)
Thank u Shilpa :)
DeleteUff! Kya contrast hai. First one is cute and the second one.... :(
ReplyDeleteTwo opposites attract every body.
ReplyDelete:) Thank u Usha ji
DeleteSecond one was scary!!
ReplyDeleteWas meant to be ;)
DeleteGood ones :) one cute, one scary...looks like we have a whole bouquet of imagination
ReplyDelete55er brings out our imagination doesn't it? So much to explore in just so few words!
DeleteLast one takes the cake!
ReplyDeleteThanks Meens :)
DeleteI so loved the first one
ReplyDeleteThank u so much Tina :)
DeleteLoved the perspectives!
ReplyDeleteThanks Michelle...wanted the variations!
DeleteLovely expression, Aditi :)
ReplyDelete1st one is so sweet. Meow :) treasures must be milk/fish :)
2nd one is upsetting...
Hehe,,ya...thanks!
DeleteIt was his dead mother singing for him? Scary!
ReplyDeleteYup...yup! *evil grin*
Deleteomg!! The second one was damn scary!!
ReplyDeleteyikes!!
Thanks pixie :)
DeleteWow. Wonderful stories. Looking forward to more 55 Fiction from you (y).
ReplyDeleteThank u so much Sonia :)
DeleteBoth of them are so beautiful. Last one is sad and reminds of Dad when grandmother elapsed when he was two.
ReplyDeleteOh Vishal :(
DeleteBrilliant stories! The second one wasn't scary in a "creepy/chilling" sort of way. Actually when you think about it, it's quite touching. It conveys the message that even after dying, our mothers would still watch over us.
ReplyDeleteBrilliantly handled!
Thanks Sreesha :) great insight there!
DeleteAnd the first one reminded me of Garfield :P though I am sure, he has never gotten up and done anything remotely strenuous, especially during nap hours :D
ReplyDeleteHaha :) oh god...can't even picture him in this! ;)
DeleteNovelty of the two stories kept me reading, Aditi :) Good takes, both!
ReplyDeleteThanks Shailaja :)
DeleteVaried themes and beautiful take ! The second one, wow.... really chilling ! Loved both, Aditi :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Sreeja :)
DeleteNice article Aditi keep it up see indian movie update on http://guruofmovie.blogspot.in
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