Friday, March 7, 2014

Into the Night!

I slyly entered the house, holding my breath. I had been keeping an eye on these new kids on the block. I knew how their furniture was placed, which grocery needed a refill as the week ended and of course where I would find my treasure. Alas, a vase tumbled and gave me away. Meow!

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His loud wails broke me from my deep slumber. I checked my watch; I was asleep only for 15 minutes! All had been taken care of - his feed, his diapers, his snuggly teddy. And then I heard her sweet singing voice. Terrified, I ran to his room. His mother had died giving him birth.

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Linking this to Day 6 of the Write Tribe Festival of words where we had to show our creative best in just 55 words. I enjoy writing 55 Fiction, you can see my previous attempts here.

51 comments:

  1. Aditi...yeah, the second one scared me too a little bit but both great 55ers :)

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  2. WOW..awesome 55er's. The second was scary!

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  3. Nice little posts. The second one was eerie/scary.

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  4. Woaa the last is brilliant... Loved your 55 fictions

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  5. I liked the first one.Why the singing voice in second story?Should it be screaming?

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    1. Thanks :) actually the singing voice cz the mother was singing to put the baby to sleep again...

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  6. The first one brought a smile and the second one... that was chilling!!
    Good ones, Aditi :)

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  7. Uff! Kya contrast hai. First one is cute and the second one.... :(

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  8. Two opposites attract every body.

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  9. Good ones :) one cute, one scary...looks like we have a whole bouquet of imagination

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    1. 55er brings out our imagination doesn't it? So much to explore in just so few words!

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  10. Lovely expression, Aditi :)
    1st one is so sweet. Meow :) treasures must be milk/fish :)
    2nd one is upsetting...

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  11. It was his dead mother singing for him? Scary!

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  12. omg!! The second one was damn scary!!

    yikes!!

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  13. Wow. Wonderful stories. Looking forward to more 55 Fiction from you (y).

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  14. Both of them are so beautiful. Last one is sad and reminds of Dad when grandmother elapsed when he was two.

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  15. Brilliant stories! The second one wasn't scary in a "creepy/chilling" sort of way. Actually when you think about it, it's quite touching. It conveys the message that even after dying, our mothers would still watch over us.
    Brilliantly handled!

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  16. And the first one reminded me of Garfield :P though I am sure, he has never gotten up and done anything remotely strenuous, especially during nap hours :D

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    1. Haha :) oh god...can't even picture him in this! ;)

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  17. Novelty of the two stories kept me reading, Aditi :) Good takes, both!

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  18. Varied themes and beautiful take ! The second one, wow.... really chilling ! Loved both, Aditi :)

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