Friday, August 2, 2013

The Incomplete Letter

She couldn't breathe...a pain engulfed her heart as she blankly stared at the letter in front of her. "It is him!", she said loudly to herself, confirming that this isn't a ghost of her dreams but real. She bit her lip, sniffed back a tear and ran her fingers along his handwriting...


"He has eyes just like yours....that is all you saw? Nothing else??" she cried. There was no address that could lead to him....just this incomplete letter that had stirred up the many buried emotions. Suddenly she felt claustrophobic, the walls of the house drawing closer to her inch by inch. She ran out, on the streets, desperately looking for him. But, alas....their story was to remain incomplete..forever....She couldn't even tell him that it was his son, he saw.
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24 comments:

  1. AditiAugust 2, 2013 at 11:50 PM

    The day 2 prompt for the August photo a day challenge was 'Incomplete'. How do you find this interpretation of mine?

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  2. AnonymousAugust 3, 2013 at 12:07 AM

    You interpretation is really Awesome...Really Loved it.. :-)
    BTW Picture abhi baki hai mere Dost.. :-)

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    1. AditiAugust 3, 2013 at 2:14 AM

      Thanks a lot Harsha...and you got me thinking...so I guess ab picture poori karni hi padegi! :)

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  3. OurJaipur.ComAugust 3, 2013 at 3:54 AM

    Very Nice. . .

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  4. KathyAugust 3, 2013 at 8:02 AM

    How poignant and heart wrenching! I loved this!

    Kathy
    http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com

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    1. AditiAugust 3, 2013 at 2:50 PM

      Thanks a lot Kathy and welcome here! Hope to see you around! :)

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  5. AnonymousAugust 3, 2013 at 10:13 AM

    Aditi!boss whr wer u all these days ? lovely !! intense storyline! poignant !You remind me Malgudi Days stories ...they used to be packed with human emotions .. unexplained . just felt ... Emotional kar ditta madam ji !

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    1. AditiAugust 3, 2013 at 2:55 PM

      Oh Jack this is the best compliment I received ever!! Thank you so much Sirji!! :) I am myself discovering this side of mine through blogging and your encouragement and appreciation keeps me motivated!!

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  6. amita kaushivaAugust 3, 2013 at 12:50 PM

    Wow! Wonder why were you under cover all these years?

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    1. AditiAugust 3, 2013 at 2:56 PM

      Dunno... busy with Life...but life is so so much more! I have just started to explore and have a looong way to go! Thank you for always being there!

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  7. Corinne RodriguesAugust 3, 2013 at 5:01 PM

    I hate sad endings, but you did a great job with this story, Aditi!

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    1. AditiAugust 3, 2013 at 10:35 PM

      Awww Corinne sorry...maybe next time I'll do a happy one!
      N thanks a lot...really appreciate!

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  8. aliasgarmukhtiar mukhtiarAugust 3, 2013 at 8:56 PM

    liked it

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  9. Shilpa GargDecember 4, 2013 at 4:39 PM

    Oh!! That's so sad and heart breaking!!

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    1. AditiDecember 6, 2013 at 9:44 AM

      Thank you Shilpa for coming back to read this. I hate it too....but hopefully it will be a happy ending!

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  10. Rex_VixDecember 4, 2013 at 10:31 PM

    I hate stories where the couple get separated without words. :-(

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    1. AditiDecember 6, 2013 at 9:44 AM

      :( sorry...but I'll make the ending a happy one! :)

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  11. preethiDecember 10, 2013 at 2:19 PM

    wow...i was reading backwards from the write tribe post...but commenting in order..lol loved it :)

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  12. Richa SinghDecember 15, 2013 at 12:02 PM

    And here it begins... the rollercoaster ride.. moving over to read the rest :-)

    Richa

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  13. Animesh GangulyMarch 9, 2014 at 2:20 AM

    I just downloaded your novella "All for love". Is this a part of that?
    Lovely piece of writing, Aditi. Brilliant. Keep going.

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